Flash Fiction Friday from
- http://www.flashfictionfriday.com
(I know it’s Wednesday)
Cue: Write a story where your
protagonist is mistaken about something they “know” to be true.
Length:
Up to 1200 words
The End.
“Why are you lying to me?”
“I’m not – look, Dave, we have
been through this enough times.”
The girl looked tired.
Bloodshot eyes with puffed out bags draped heavily beneath them betrayed her
lack of sleep but it was the sheer wall of stupidity and lack of trust she was
facing that exhausted her the most.
She knew she had lost him, she
just didn’t know if she cared.
Dave’s heart was broken.
His head was telling him that
it had only just happened, that Stacey’s horrendously callous ability to lie
and cover up her actions the night before had killed their love. His heart knew
better. The love had died years ago.
The love died the day the
trust was lost.
Dave stopped trusting Stacey
two years earlier and when that happened their relationship entered a downward spiral
from which it hadn’t recovered. It had seemed such a good idea. Both of them
went on separate holidays with their friends, recapturing some of the fun they
both had known in their youth.
Dave had a blast. He’d drunk
and eaten whatever he liked. He’d checked out the ladies on the beach and
flirted outrageously with them in the bars. Then his mate had suggested a game.
They had to decide whose
“bird” was the most ‘doable’. Who they thought was likely to be the best in
bed. What a laugh. They did it on paper as a secret ballot.
Stacey won by a landslide.
At first Dave was proud but as
they laughed about it he began feeling uncomfortable. Why were his mates
talking like that? Why did they all think they stood a chance?
Dave drank hard that night and
woke up with Jemima. Was that her name? He really wasn’t sure but however fast
her name may have escaped him, the guilt stayed put.
But it wasn’t just him was it?
Stacey was clearly as bad. She must obviously be flirting around his mates all
the time and God knows what she got up to in Cornwall?
Dave’s inability to trust
himself manifested itself swiftly into a suspicion of Stacey. The arguments
flew thick and fast after that holiday but Stacey never actually admitted any
wrong doing, so Dave never did either.
Once trust dies so does the
relationship, even if it isn’t actually the other person you don’t trust.
But he generously forgave her,
even if he couldn’t forget.
And now she was doing it all
over again, and this time he would not be able to forgive. Her face was so
brazen, so adamantly innocent that he knew he would never again be able to
believe a word she said. How could such a convincing liar ever be believed?
Stacey sat with her head in
her hands and shook with a rage she could barely contain. What was she supposed
to do now, pack her bags and leave? This was as much her place as his now, it
was home. Stacey had moved in four years ago and felt totally in tune with the
flat. She could easily imagine the smug smile of satisfaction on her mum’s face
when she found out just how right she had been about Dave all along.
Dave watched her closely. He
desperately needed her to give him the redemption he sought. If only she would
admit her failings and tell him what really happened, then he could be angry,
then he could be right, then he could be forgiven.
But no relief was coming.
Stacey stood and silently headed upstairs to pack some essentials. Dave watched
her go and let his shoulders sag as the burden of responsibility was gone. The
relationship was over and it wasn’t Dave at fault. She would go. It was the
right thing. It was time to move on.
Wordlessly, she threw things
into a bag as tears damned well refused to escape from her eyes. Dave watched,
stifling his own confused emotions as he did so.
As she headed to the door,
Dave’s mouth betrayed his intentions and shouted out for one last chance.
“Don’t go…” He shouted, “Don’t.
Just tell me. Tell me and I’ll understand. I will. We can work through this but
you have to tell me. You have to be honest and we..”
“I have been honest, you
stupid bastard” Stacey interrupted, “ I’ve told you everything – nothing
happened!”
“I’m not stupid. I’m not. I
know where you were last night”
“Yes, I’ve told you where I
was. We were all there – at Jane’s. All of us stayed over when we missed the
last train, me Jane, Julie, Vanessa, Pippa and Shelley! How many times have we
been through this?”
“Yes I know all that so why
won’t you be honest with me?”
“Oh for Christ’s sake, Dave.”
“Stacey. I’m 36 years old.
I’ve been around and I know how things work. I know what happens when women get
drunk and have a sleepover so will just stop lying and tell me who won the
bloody pillow-fight?”
7 comments:
Great tension between the characters! I could feel the conflicted emotions.
I really loved the emotions - I felt their confusion and frustration. I'm not sure the last line works, though. Pillow fight? Am I just not picking up on some innuendo?
Thanks Carmen. I know. The last line was just my private joke to myself. I couldn't stop myself it just says that the thing Dave wad wrong about was the commited belief he has (as I do) that whenever women have a sleepover they ALWAYS have a pillow fight. I learnt that off the telly :-)
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Thanks Carmen. I know. The last line was just my private joke to myself. I couldn't stop myself it just says that the thing Dave wad wrong about was the commited belief he has (as I do) that whenever women have a sleepover they ALWAYS have a pillow fight. I learnt that off the telly :-)
Thanks Carmen. I know. The last line was just my private joke to myself. I couldn't stop myself it just says that the thing Dave wad wrong about was the commited belief he has (as I do) that whenever women have a sleepover they ALWAYS have a pillow fight. I learnt that off the telly :-)
Great story. Projecting his own guilt onto her, as if to justify his own behavior. If she cheated on him, then his cheating on her would be okay somehow. Quite the distorted logic. Terrific character piece.
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